Comments on: Lens - Trying to get pregnant quickly http://www.squidrich.com/lens-trying-to-get-pregnant-quickly/ Karl Pemberton Thu, 29 Jul 2010 18:26:07 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.7 hourly 1 By: Rachel http://www.squidrich.com/lens-trying-to-get-pregnant-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-71 Rachel Mon, 16 Mar 2009 09:39:03 +0000 http://www.squidrich.com/?p=98#comment-71 Hi everyone WOW - how did I miss this feedback - sorry - I can be really dumb at times. I thought Karl was fantastic to put my lens on here but I didn't know people would make comments too. You have all made my day (which started out rough and its only 9.33 am!) so thank you very much. Craig - will add the mens section - you are so right lols and their tests aren't painful - they even get Magazines!!! Hypnotist Blaze - thank you very much for your input - not sure I completely understand on the colours thing. The keyword I was aiming for was trying to get pregnant quickly but I will change it in view of the implied failure bit. Joan - please critque any of my lens - I need all the help I can get and being Irish appreciate a straight talker. Thank you Norman, Jonathan and BBanreff for your help too. I am going to try and put a picture in the list on supplements but may need some help doing that one so if you can point me to a lens that shows (in simple steps please!) how to do it, that would be great. Thanks very much Guys and Karl for picking my lens. Rach Hi everyone

WOW - how did I miss this feedback - sorry - I can be really dumb at times. I thought Karl was fantastic to put my lens on here but I didn’t know people would make comments too.

You have all made my day (which started out rough and its only 9.33 am!) so thank you very much.

Craig - will add the mens section - you are so right lols and their tests aren’t painful - they even get Magazines!!!

Hypnotist Blaze - thank you very much for your input - not sure I completely understand on the colours thing. The keyword I was aiming for was trying to get pregnant quickly but I will change it in view of the implied failure bit.

Joan - please critque any of my lens - I need all the help I can get and being Irish appreciate a straight talker.

Thank you Norman, Jonathan and BBanreff for your help too. I am going to try and put a picture in the list on supplements but may need some help doing that one so if you can point me to a lens that shows (in simple steps please!) how to do it, that would be great.

Thanks very much Guys and Karl for picking my lens.

Rach

]]> By: BBraneff http://www.squidrich.com/lens-trying-to-get-pregnant-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-57 BBraneff Fri, 13 Mar 2009 00:00:04 +0000 http://www.squidrich.com/?p=98#comment-57 wow! I read you lens and was amazed! Some great information and pretty well written. I like how you used your keywords in the titles. Simple basic SEO that works. Maybe one more picture to add some aesthetics to the long section about supplements. Overall I think you have a 5star lens. Good job! wow! I read you lens and was amazed! Some great information and pretty well written. I like how you used your keywords in the titles. Simple basic SEO that works. Maybe one more picture to add some aesthetics to the long section about supplements. Overall I think you have a 5star lens. Good job!

]]> By: Jonathan Jenkins http://www.squidrich.com/lens-trying-to-get-pregnant-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-53 Jonathan Jenkins Thu, 12 Mar 2009 21:41:47 +0000 http://www.squidrich.com/?p=98#comment-53 You could maybe call it "How To...", or make it a question: "Are You Wanting To...". But like the earlier comment said, these are just minor comments on a really nice webpage! You could maybe call it “How To…”, or make it a question: “Are You Wanting To…”. But like the earlier comment said, these are just minor comments on a really nice webpage!

]]> By: Jonathan Jenkins http://www.squidrich.com/lens-trying-to-get-pregnant-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-50 Jonathan Jenkins Thu, 12 Mar 2009 18:28:10 +0000 http://www.squidrich.com/?p=98#comment-50 I like the lens layout - nice mixture of text and images, and looks like a good quantity of useful information. I like the lens layout - nice mixture of text and images, and looks like a good quantity of useful information.

]]> By: Joan Adams http://www.squidrich.com/lens-trying-to-get-pregnant-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-45 Joan Adams Thu, 12 Mar 2009 17:33:54 +0000 http://www.squidrich.com/?p=98#comment-45 Beautiful lens! Great bio pic! Add a picture to the supplements section. Lots of different modules and they look great! Love the dose of humor in there too. Not at all sure what to add - the lens is great. maybe a song from utube at the top "high hopes" or something kinda silly like that? remove "trying to" from title - so it reads Get Pregnant Quickly headlines are tough for me, but that one seems long.... Beautiful lens! Great bio pic!
Add a picture to the supplements section.
Lots of different modules and they look great! Love the dose of humor in there too.
Not at all sure what to add - the lens is great. maybe a song from utube at the top “high hopes” or something kinda silly like that?

remove “trying to” from title - so it reads Get Pregnant Quickly
headlines are tough for me, but that one seems long….

]]> By: Craig http://www.squidrich.com/lens-trying-to-get-pregnant-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-44 Craig Thu, 12 Mar 2009 17:33:09 +0000 http://www.squidrich.com/?p=98#comment-44 I would suggest adding a section about the man's involvement and potential to get fertility testing done. There are a number of men who will let their wives go through a lot of tests before doing their one test. I would suggest adding a section about the man’s involvement and potential to get fertility testing done. There are a number of men who will let their wives go through a lot of tests before doing their one test.

]]> By: HypnotistBLAZE http://www.squidrich.com/lens-trying-to-get-pregnant-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-41 HypnotistBLAZE Thu, 12 Mar 2009 17:15:14 +0000 http://www.squidrich.com/?p=98#comment-41 Hi Karl (and Rachel). Indulge the former Art Director and copywriter in me as I suggest some points about various things here for you and she to consider. Karel, I like the color scheme here. I don't like the faint aspect of the colors, both of which make seeing and reading less than easy. Rachel's headline is good, not great. It is workable but can be much better. As a trained hypnotist I know the power of word choices. And one of the best known is the implication of failure in the word try. Try implies failure. I'd rather read a headline with the benefit of succeeding at becoming pregnant... asap. (Why quickly is not explained; it ought to be. If not, I wouldn't use the word.) Well, those are my few cents worth of commentary. Do with each as you will. HypnotistBLAZE Hi Karl (and Rachel).
Indulge the former Art Director and copywriter in me as I suggest some points about various things here for you and she to consider.

Karel, I like the color scheme here. I don’t like the faint aspect of the colors, both of which make seeing and reading less than easy.

Rachel’s headline is good, not great. It is workable but can be much better.

As a trained hypnotist I know the power of word choices. And one of the best known is the implication of failure in the word try. Try implies failure.

I’d rather read a headline with the benefit of succeeding at becoming pregnant… asap. (Why quickly is not explained; it ought to be. If not, I wouldn’t use the word.)

Well, those are my few cents worth of commentary. Do with each as you will.

HypnotistBLAZE

]]> By: Norman Smith http://www.squidrich.com/lens-trying-to-get-pregnant-quickly/comment-page-1/#comment-35 Norman Smith Tue, 10 Mar 2009 07:29:56 +0000 http://www.squidrich.com/?p=98#comment-35 Good choice Karl, Well done Rachel ,check out the info people ! Good choice Karl, Well done Rachel ,check out the info people !

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